Black Thought

That bad huh? Guess I'll find something to do with my life. I was thinking about enlisting in the Air Force. lol Seriously though, any feedback will help me figure ...

Hi mimimac. So here's my take on the story. The plot itself is compelling but as I was reading I did not feel engaged in the story at all because ...

Some parts seem a little cliche, I recommend rewording them. To smash in every bone in your body and tear you limb from limb And the phrase "how I" in ...

I liked this story. You have a talent for detail. One thing you could do to make this better would be to add more detail about aunt Cathy with a ...

Thanks Jane! :) BlackThought, It was a school assignment and we were not allowed to use the word "said" I quite like the detail different words give but yes I ...

Part 1 : Cindy kept running her mouth and it was starting to get on my nerves. I could hear Joe playing his acoustic bass in his bedroom. I wished ...

This was an interesting story. The only problems I had with it were the quotation tags which tend to get a little irritating at times. “Darling, I know you would, ...

ANY feedback will be appreciated. Even if all you have to say is "I stopped reading after the 1st sentence because my eyes started bleeding", I'll appreciate that more than ...

Sorry it took so long to get back to you. So here’s my take on this piece. The two major problems I identified after reading your story are the dialogue ...

Tom’s in the kitchen when Daniel steps inside. He pulls out a couple of cans of Budweiser. No wait, let’s make them bottles instead of cans. While we’re at it, ...

This story’s about shaky hands, not dead mice. I don’t really care for this title but what do I know, I’m just a narrator. I wanted to call it “On ...

I skimmed through the first review and realized I have a slightly different opinion. Inserting a swear word every other sentence/every other paragraph is fine if that's the way your ...

Hey, You wonder why I sleep with a goddam 357 Magnum under my pillow and a fucking Mossberg shotgun under my bed. First thing I want to point out is ...

You wonder why I sleep with a goddam 357 Magnum under my pillow and a fucking Mossberg shotgun under my bed. Well if you had as many people sneak into ...

^^ I'd be glad to review your story for you. I'll get back to you as soon as I can.